During the holiday shopping season, my inbox is full of holiday emails from online merchants—fighting for my eyes to see and open their email first. The subject line is your first (and arguably your only) chance of your email being read. I don’t open every merchant’s email that says, “Buy from me! Buy from me!”, but I do open the ones with an enticing offer.
- Avoid generic subject lines. Give them a reason to open your email with descriptive text, familiar brand-names, or popular holiday gift ideas.
- Create a sense of urgency, such as “limited-time only” promotions.
- Include discount percentages or dollar reductions. Many retailers offer shipping discounts during the holidays.
Vertical Response, an email service provider, has some examples of good and bad subject lines.
Bad examples
- Neiman Marcus: FREE SHIPPING + The Gifting Event: Great gifts for everyoneAND YOU! (Too many caps, too long, too much punctuation weird spacing. This one hurts my eyes.)
- Banana Republic: Your Holiday Offer is Here + Men's Outerwear
(What is the offer Banana?)
Good examples
- Shutterfly: janine, 2 days to enjoy holiday cards on us
- RICHART Chocolate: Handmade French Truffles 2006
- Frontgate: Remember, Save 20% Site-wide at Frontgate.com
- Brookstone: Full-size authentic arcade games--just like you remember
Always remember the following legal restrictions: subject lines cannot mislead the reader from the content of the email. Also, beware that certain words and phrases (such as abusing the word “Free”) may cause the email to be flagged as spam. Yes, you can use “Free” in the subject; it is still very effective. Just don’t make it the first word, spell it in all caps, or immediately followed by an exclamation point.
Jenny